Here s my edited version of my narrative story.
“I can’t wait to get to Queenstown! The three brothers Paul, Michael and Jacob screamed. They had just left New Zealand. Jacob, Paul and Michael all sat together. The three drank sprite, ate chips and had some lollies from the little kids who gave them out. Jacob had a secret that he had been waiting to tell his brothers
“We should be here by now!” Paul moaned as it had been a long flight. So all he did was play continuously on the screen in front of his seat. Paul yawned and asked Jacob and Michael, “Should we have a sleep?” “Yes we should aye,” Jacob and Michael replied. After agreeing the three fell into a deep sleep.
Boom! “What was that!” The three woke up abruptly thinking what was that. “It sounded like something blew up,” Jacob told Paul. “Of course something blew up! Why do you think we heard a big boom! Paul answered. Jacob shrugged his shoulders. They were thinking what was that.
Suddenly the plane went all wonky. So Paul hopped out of his seat while the other two stayed. Paul asked the staff why was that happening. The staff member wept, “Both of our pilots have passed out!” Straight away Paul ran back to his seat and grabbed Michael and Jacob by their shirts and dragged them to the staff member. The staff that Paul had been talking to let them through and Paul, Jacob and Michael flew the plane. They tried to! “We can’t do this! Its over,” Paul cried. “We can! Just believe,” Jacob answered.
Something peculiar was happening to Jacob. He was turning blue, his clothes started to transform, he started to transform into Superman. “Jacobs.....Superman! WOW!” Paul and Michael cried surprisingly. Jacob or should I say Superman went out the closest exit door and lifted up the plane and made it straight. He held it all the way to Queenstown airport and the people were surprised to see Superman in person.
All the people took photos. When the people in the plane came out on the tarmac they all cried, “Thank you Superman for saving us! You are a true hero!” They all thanked him for saving their lives!